My experience with the class workshop today was rather helpful. While I didn't understand why I needed three copies of my rant, I suppose it kind of came in handy when one guy (who wasn't even my partner) asked for a copy of mine. I was glad I sat with a fellow journalist to help me really collectively and concisely tell my story. My partner really thought I did a good job at telling my story even though I was about 85 words over the limit. That's something I'll be working on tomorrow. I think my strengths (as detailed by my partner) is the imagery I'm able to evoke but my weakness is that I tend to get too wordy. Usually the best way to take care of it is to remove a few "that"s or repetitive statements.
What I wanted to do with this piece was give a sense of how being alone in a car can really be a chance to contemplate and reminisce on life currently, past, and (sometimes not so successfully) the future. I tried to show how driving alone allows for the complete opening up of oneself to what's going on without outside influences keeping us in check. The outside influences even dictate our music choice, which is apparent in the music one chooses to listen to... Something I may try to mention in my piece now that it came out.
The only thing that really got in my way was the word limit. Usually when I get a story with a 350 - 500 word limit, I can't think of anything to say. With this, however, I had too much to say and wished I could just get it all down.. Although, I understand for timeliness, it's better to be able to say things concisely. Overall though, I felt I accomplished everything I set out to accomplished.
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